Interesting piece, with a lot of space and verb. I have no complaints about writing, instrumentation, or pacing. Transitions are very nicely done.
My sole gripe is how little center channel I hear. Most everything sounds as if it's been spreadilated, and the 20k and above in the mix is quite up there for each instrument, but especially your hats. Nothing melodic ever reaches those heights, so it's a little jarring to hear a hihat and reverb tails almost as loud as the melody.
There's a bit of boxiness to the overall sound. I recommend cutting 250 hz and below on all of your reverbs (to taste of course) and centering your bass at these frequencies. There are plugins to make this happen. I just forget their names.
The sine bass is somehow a bit loud and also nearly inaudible at the same time. I think that's just characteristic sine waves. I recommend pulse, saw, square, and ramp over sine -- sine waves take up a lot of room in the mix to be heard and are best as a sub bass underneath another bass, imo.
Other than that, really enjoyed the piece and think you did a wonderful job arranging. Thanks for coming out to NGUAC! (again)